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 Overlooking Tokyo, nestled within the National Museum of Emerging Science and Innovation (the Miraikan) lies the Park of Aging, a realm where time bends into the distant future, offering a rare portal to your mind and body after years worn by aging. Video games blur vision, mimicking cataracts. Sounds are stripped of high pitches. In a photo booth that mirrors the trials of aged perception, facial expressions fade and blur. The simple act of recalling a shopping list committed to memory becomes an odyssey, ceaselessly interrupted in a bustling market. Walking in place on pedals with ankle weights, and leaning on a cart simulates the wear of time on the body, and the weight of age on posture. The Park of Aging is not just an exhibit but an immersive conversation across time, a dialogue with your older self through senses—sight, sound, and the aches and pains of age. This journey of empathy extends beyond the future self, to also foster a deeper connection with a present overlooked cohort: the elderly.
 	
-The Park of Aging is a poignant example of proprioceptive, post-symbolic communication, where participants receive information through an intimate, sensorial experience beyond merely interpreting words and symbols, utilizing all sensemaking of the body; the Park not only immerse participants in the sensations of being old, but part of being old is also a degradation in the ability to see and hear words and symbols. While the Park of Aging was a novel, temporal conversation with aging, experiences of proprioceptive, non-symbolic communication include mediation, psychedelics, religious experience, romantic intimacy, dance, yoga, combat, and sports. Not coincidentally, these experiences—harnessing information gathered from many senses (“higher-bandwidth communication”)—also are correlated with long-lasting human bonding and connection when shared. Perhaps it is the diversity of information simultaneously presented to the senses (depth) that contribute to the significance of the experience and therefore strength of connection and “union.”
+The Park of Aging is a poignant example of proprioceptive, post-symbolic communication, where participants receive information through an intimate, sensorial experience beyond merely interpreting words and symbols, utilizing all sensemaking of the body; the Park immerses participants in the sensations of being old, unlocking the first-hand experience of the deteriorating senses, including seeing and hearing words and symbols. While the Park is a novel, temporal conversation with aging, experiences of proprioceptive, non-symbolic communication today are ubiqutious and include mediation, psychedelics, religious experience, romantic intimacy, dance, yoga, combat, and sports. Not coincidentally, these experiences which harness information gathered from many senses (“higher-bandwidth communication”) also are correlated with long-lasting human bonding and connection when shared. Perhaps it is the diversity of information simultaneously presented to the senses (depth) that contribute to the significance of the experience and therefore strength of connection and “union.”
 
-Technological innovations such as neural-interfaces, mediated reality, and generative AI expands the possibility space of post-symbolic communication, where unions within oneself and among people can occur not simply in person, but across temporal, physical, and social distance facilitated by technology. In this chapter, we describe these technologies and explore the frontiers, examining how these technologies could revolutionize interpersonal connections, education, and collaboration, enabling the transmission of thoughts, feelings, and sensory experiences beyond the compression of spoken or written language. We consider the opportunities to rectify cultural misunderstandings and conflicts, by fostering profound empathy and shared experience. Yet, where ideas flow as seamlessly as emotions, we also explore  the risks of connectivity, including surveillance, homogenization,  disconnection and oblivion.
+Technological innovations such as neural-interfaces, mediated reality, and generative AI expands the possibility space of post-symbolic communication, where unions within oneself and among people can occur not simply in person, but across temporal, physical, and social distance facilitated by technology. In this chapter, we describe these technologies and explore the frontiers, examining how these technologies could revolutionize interpersonal connections, education, and collaboration, enabling the transmission of thoughts, feelings, and sensory experiences beyond the compression of words and symbols. We consider the opportunities to rectify cultural misunderstandings and conflicts, by fostering profound empathy and shared experience. Yet, where ideas flow as seamlessly as emotions, we also explore the risks of connectivity, including surveillance, homogenization, disconnection and oblivion.
 
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